4271| 40
|
古典词十三基础班第六讲浮槎组作业贴评阅韩湘子2-9层,无情10层后 |
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| |||
| ||
点评
简评:作者手法和思路不错,做到先答后问,赞一个,下片第二句无字不如难字来的实在,残字火气有点大,组词造句尚待提高如几共,差拟等等,上片第四句孤平,摸应属古仄,整首作品来看,起的低,结也偏低!
| ||
|Archiver|手机版|小黑屋|古典听风书院 ( 蜀ICP备15023305号-1 )
GMT+8, 2024-12-22 00:49 , Processed in 0.109375 second(s), 21 queries .
Powered by Discuz! X3.2 Licensed
© 2001-2013 Comsenz Inc.