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古典学院词十三期创作班第十六讲驼云组作业贴,评阅:双层/烟雨阁,单层/倚楼听风雨. |
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问好听雨。格律正确,上片似乎是在湖畔赏玩,但寄前方,没看明白意思。下片的千番分别,无以为寄,结句没表达好,意思能明白,词语直白了些,欠词味。个见!
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