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爱你一万年点评:这首小令构架不错,意脉连惯,句句紧扣,很有词味。但上片有二三字平仄不符,下片也有。注意!这是硬伤,随便不得。
还有句式,如果不懂音律,一般按例词句式去写。当然你懂音律,另当别论。下片中
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