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问好慕容瑞西!互评不错,补充两句,歇拍的念想也,与过片衔接得不是很紧,有断裂的感觉。谁之祸?这祸字来得突然,后面也没有答,承接。下片几句各自为阵。韵用得有些凑。全文星字用得多,却体现不了要表达的意.思
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