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古典诗十八期溪山组第二十九讲作业帖 | 
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境若仙,韵清弦,不通顺。水流溪绕,重复。结句无力,因为转句铺垫不够。三种花都开得艳,你说花开花落,没有说服力。转句改成海棠正艳杏先落,再接到合句,就合理了。 
 
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通篇流畅自然,有唐宋遗风。唯人不似,话说一半,然 
 
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