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古典学院词八期创作班第一讲G组作业贴 评阅老师 飘影若涵 |
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清清君此词,前两日就拜读过,足见性情,至情至孝,当为吾辈范!,然于词之艺学而论,期可再锤,前余已于群中略承谬论,不复赘言.
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小凡此词,重于情,淡于味,可归属西野一派,虽形于词,然词法稍欠,前亦与君言及,不复赘言.敛词成句,意象相融,以期多砺.
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小阿哥此调内线很紧,意象丰满完整,似见老成,提点建议:酌词雕句尚求自然为是.
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