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问好安亿学友;第一题正确,第二题;格律韵部正确,汉河不是银河!可斟酌。语言可再练。顺祝学习愉快!
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问好龙行天下学友;第一题正确,第二题格律韵部正确,脉络清晰,立意新颖。给优秀吧
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问好学友。第一首起句思挤韵,会恨迟读起来拗口,和迢递相思也不搭,建议起句修改。第二首不错,转结有新意,点赞!
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