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评:问好同学,首联破题,不错。颔联由近及远,身边的杨柳,到心爱的人已经远去,下分句青山隐隐约约,看不清楚。颔联就有问题了,既然有雾,不会有云了,建议斟酌一下哈。尾联有提升空间。不对之处,望海涵,期待...
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