2526| 103
|
词十五初级班第九讲易安组作业贴,评阅老师:洲雪5-19、润龙剩余楼层 |
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
点评
问好秋叶同学!这首小词整体布局合理,遣词清婉,情景达意。上片飒飒西风,是凋零的,后面闲绪随风,意脉不相承,这里改动一下。其它尚好,不错加油!
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
|Archiver|手机版|小黑屋|古典听风书院 ( 蜀ICP备15023305号-1 )
GMT+8, 2024-6-20 19:41 , Processed in 0.125000 second(s), 25 queries .