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古典词十三期创作班第十讲驼云组作业贴,评阅双层/烟雨阁。单层/倚楼听风雨 |
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问好春光。双燕,鸥鹭,花,桃花,有些费墨了,春愁来的突兀了,个见!
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问好一方。小词词脉清晰,把一个少女等待情郎的场景,描写的惟妙惟肖,赞!学习了!
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