楼主: 诗雨后柳
|
古典词十九初级班折桂组第五讲作业 |
点评
闻笛老师点评:点评:
问好同学,此词整体看来主题还是有的。只是语义表达过于累赘, 层次不清,缺乏章法有点乱。建议还是好好斟酌一下。不过能写出来就是好的开端。加油!
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
|Archiver|手机版|小黑屋|古典听风书院 ( 蜀ICP备15023305号-1 )
GMT+8, 2024-12-22 18:55 , Processed in 0.122070 second(s), 26 queries .
Powered by Discuz! X3.2 Licensed
© 2001-2013 Comsenz Inc.