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古典词二十初级班听雨组第十六讲作业贴 |
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问好玉瑶:能围绕题目描写,写出了暮春时的景象,用杜宇做铺垫,起拍点题,情景交融。层次感再清晰一点会更好!
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问好同学,这首词写的挺好的,脉络清晰布局合理,对疫情期间的状态描写的非常合理。上下片衔接紧凑。赞👍
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