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山风老师点评:同学好!小词格律无误,立意尚好!上片起句造景可,从句意顺序上看第二意群跟第三意群交换位置更有逻辑,掩了窗棂怎么能看见梧桐叶坠是吧!过片三字句未连成一线,下片紧承,句意顺畅,扣合得比...
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