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古典诗十八期溪山组第二十七讲作业帖 | 
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问好,小诗起承转合自然流畅,按给的句意生发很到位,做到了情景交融,点赞。 
 
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诗不错,首句通畅赋起,尾句点题,是个好句。 
 
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徒自怜是句中情绪点染,与转句情怀略有不同。 
 
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