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问好学友,格律无误,内容切题,上下片二组对偶工整。点赞!
不足之处:语言太直白,缺乏诗味。个别地方用词不够准确,比如“高悬丽日”,朝阳应该是光芒四射,用高悬一词来修饰,没这个感觉吧?望多斟酌。个人之见
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