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问好学友!格律无误!首字平仄比6/2,不符合作业要求!整体看来,写的太随意,不见早雪的影子。语句也很直白!颈联对仗不工,词性也有误。尾联不知所云!建议重新布局来写紧紧围绕主题!写多了就熟悉了!继续努力!
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