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古典词二十八期初级班云帆组第十五讲作业帖 |
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问好学友:这阙以“学词有感”为题的蝶恋花,句与句之间跳跃过太,既未体现“学词”过程,亦未交代“有感”的实质,须多读范词…
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问好学友:这阙以“学词”为题的蝶恋花,立意高雅,布局合理,意脉连续,足见作者诗词功夫深厚,但用字上如上片起句“路”和结句“暮”等还须多斟。
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