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古典诗二十二期初级班九州组第十三讲作业帖 |
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雨蝶简评,问好诗友,小诗立意不错,通篇议论抒事,起句出人意料,以歌起笔,尾句动人;唯三句用的重复字,虽意思能懂,但读来有点拗口,可把前二字人性,更换更适合的词。整体来说还是不错的,个见,仅供参考。
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