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古典文学院十期初级班第七讲鹤组作业贴 | 
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整首诗写的好,起承转合适当,遍是二字需在提炼。 
 
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犹自然有点不自然,合句没有余味。写的很好,向你学习。 
 
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轻抚玉影盼重逢一句格律有问题,写完必须自查。润翠浓三字需斟酌,玉影,指向不明,整首还是朗朗上口的,继续努力。 
 
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