|
古典文学院十期初级班第四讲梅组作业贴 |
| ||
点评
霜打金身翻馥郁,露欺翠叶复茏葱。(意思重叠了)
不和粉艳争春雨,偏与青松迎朔风。(意熟了)
我慕仙姿轻踏月,冷香雅韵入怀中。(仙姿似乎不是菊)
物非点评
| ||
点评
承句好,抱节乃人为,非菊意。品德太露,无味!
物非点评
| ||
| ||
| ||
|Archiver|手机版|小黑屋|古典听风书院
( 蜀ICP备15023305号-1 )
GMT+8, 2025-4-3 09:22 , Processed in 0.124681 second(s), 20 queries .
Powered by Discuz! X3.2 Licensed
© 2001-2013 Comsenz Inc.