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古典词十三基础班第九讲驼云组作业贴评阅:佬诡梓老师2层后 |
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问好听雨同学,全词很好,但尾句咱在斟酌斟酌
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问好秋叶同学,全词写的不错,但是最后“这春时”不好,在斟酌
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问好晴光同学,请节哀,虽然渗入真情实感,但是上下阕,意没有宕开,特别尾句要斟酌
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