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问好同学,小词蕴藉婉转,景起情结,脉络清晰,全篇语言流畅,上结犹好,下结点题,语言略显直白,总体不错,点赞!!!
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问好同学,小词整体不错,唯一感觉上结和下片起拍衔接不是太紧凑,徘徊一词可待斟酌,整篇诗味较浓,词味略淡,个人观点仅作参考!!!
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