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问好同学,整首还是不错的,尾联不错,唯一建议的就是颔联下分句的情感基调和整首诗有点违和了,颈联上分句的馥不是很好,“馥”应该是很浓郁的香气,显然不适合来形容草,整体结构还行,细节处注意炼字,加油!!!
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