2784| 42
|
古典诗十四期五律第十三讲晴组作业贴: |
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
点评
江春老师这首律,个人感觉,唯有凛冽,这里下字猛了点,其他地方,棒棒哒,膜拜一下
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
点评
公子好啊,起句总括承以分写,伏沙流浅底,用词精准漂亮!如斯仍逝也,岂会怨蹉跎。沧桑而不悲,气节出来了。学习好诗!
| ||
|Archiver|手机版|小黑屋|古典听风书院 ( 蜀ICP备15023305号-1 )
GMT+8, 2025-1-20 18:53 , Processed in 0.167968 second(s), 26 queries .
Powered by Discuz! X3.2 Licensed
© 2001-2013 Comsenz Inc.