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点评:此词是典型的闺怨词!写得很可以的!意脉清晰,句子流畅。但有两个地方有点错误!该词牌是平韵到底!你用了一个仄声字“怅”!但根据句意也不好更改!如果有好的思路可以重新选用韵字!第二点对仗是本词牌...
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