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古典诗十七.五律第8讲秋组作业帖 |
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问候同学,这首诗格律和用韵正确,猫见到鼠也不皱眉头啊,写猫和入深秋也不套头啊,我个人觉得诗味不浓。
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问候同学,你这首伞,首联颔联很是不错的,颈联声挤韵了,我个人认为颈联和伞没多大关系,尾联不与白云争的应该还有吧!
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问候同学,这首出律出韵凑痕颇多还有倒桩句
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