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问好流年不负:这首词平仄用韵正确,能绕题描写,立意布局尚可,上下片转承自然,抒怀情感真挚,个别用词再多加打磨,比如“弘扬文化”等。整体不错,加油哦!
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问好竹林诗音:这首词平仄用韵正确,立意清晰,绕题描写,节拍递进有序,过片抒情感人,当代题材,注意用词避免口语化。作业整体不错,加油哦!
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