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古典诗十八期春雷组第二十三讲作业帖 |
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浅评:起句绿渐渐一词意思虽可懂但显牵强,接下来转承二句跨度有点大了,,个见
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浅评:较生动的一首绝,但起句的垂字应是有力度的,不如游字较好些,再有转句与合句的长亭独坐画归船意显脱节了,上面在一心作画,下面却又去思人了,用心不专啊,个见
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问好诗友!三首小绝各具千秋,意深境远,笔法娴熟,很有功底,赏学了!
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