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中级班春雷组第七讲作业贴。 | 
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五律格律用韵正确,整体脉络清晰,遣词造句朗朗上口,很有诗味,一二三联的布局铺垫使“万物生幽意,清泉洗客心”体现的更充分,可圈可点。 
 
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五律格律用韵正确,本诗围绕旅游人事展开,整体布局不是很紧凑,立意不够明朗不够高,品之无味。 
 
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