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琳达好!纵观全诗,最喜欢末尾这句,未用胭脂面已绯。很有画面感,有生活气息!为了上下句情绪的统一,建议把上句用字改一改。其余诗的结构是合理的,表达上还显稚嫩,比如声声响,点点依,搅等地方。颈联也显得平了
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