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古典诗十八期溪山组第十九讲作业帖 | 
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浅评:起承二句说明春夜未深,雾不是太大,转句的擦字个人觉得意欠佳,擦,说明有力度和速度的存在,且距离不会太远。 
 
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浅评:起承二句笔者应再考虑一下,所述的晚春之杏花村,去言青梅?合句意过浅白了 
 
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景不错,情在哪里呢。醉字虚了,尽量少用。 
 
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