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古典诗十八期绕梁组第二十讲作业帖 | 
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问好学友!首句承句写的非常悠闲不错。赞!转句用豪车来代替繁华,略感弱些,结句品花茶可以再提升一下。 
 
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问好学友!小诗用词精准,转句合句特别好看。和若有诗书藏在心,岁月从不败美人”!有异曲同工之妙! 
 
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