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古典诗十八期溪山组第二十一讲作业帖 | 
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赞,选取物象,切入角度,都很新奇,然而并不觉得怪异。好诗 
 
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用字行文都可圈可点,造景也别具韵味。只是相比前三句,尾句弱了,收不住。 
 
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问好沅芷同学,这首小诗格律有误,“累” 字有平仄两读,当用在 “累累”一词中时读平声。 
 
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