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中级班绕梁组第四讲作业帖 | 
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问好琴瑟在御诗友:起句徒念良家子,这里的徒念是指人名吗?我就当人名理解了。此诗立意明确,承接自然。对仗尚可。前三联写梦中事。尾联写梦醒情感。整体布局合理,脉络清晰,继续努力期待佳作。 
 
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问好学友,格律有误,蕾出律,此处应平字。秀丽彩三仄尾。内容太散乱,中二联对仗不工,尾联结的随意。建议重新写一下! 
 
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