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写的不怎么好哟,多看看讲义。首联当比小花娇,这联可以,后面写就该围着娇来写。硕果与腮边不对,笑意飘不明白,后面又是山头,篱下,词性一样,句式节构一样,221/212要错开来。尾联和首联意思又重复了尾句出律
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