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古典诗十四期五律第一讲秋组作业贴: | 
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这首还是比较通顺的。没有什么毛病,章法也合理,思路清晰。颈联不错,字小,杯深,表达更强烈一点。 
 
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萧萧吧,投异乡,太怪了。逢异乡,会异乡。颈尾联互换一下,就不矛盾了。 
 
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过雁催,凑了。采菊饮酒,很悠闲的样子,不适合思乡,只适合证明秋天。颈联太凑,尾联尚可.。 
 
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