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点评
本诗有几处生造词,如茂树乡、搏命强、延入药,今后应尽量避免。颔联对于全诗情感的表达毫无意义。颈联的成名、艰辛等表述不太符合情理。北联写出了蝉的奉献精神,蝉蜕可入药,较好,但安详一词用的不恰当,莫如改为
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