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首联扣题,抓住梅花报春特点,颈联描摹花枝,颈联从香气与神韵入手,意蕴畅通,尾联弱了。
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远方老师评:脉络清晰,但遥看与暗香浮玉台不切实际,遥看梅是闻不到暗香的
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远方老师评:虽无华丽词语,但意脉流畅
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远方老师评:玉蝶,暗香,新诗,旧事,瘦骨,青衫,六平头了,忌,当避之。
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远方老师评:意顺,惟寒霜烈与白
皑皑意重!
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