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古典诗十四期五律第十讲秋组作业贴: | 
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牛郎师评:问好落拓,前二联列举了很多茶的种类,写的有些杂乱了,扬子江中水,蒙山顶上茶,针字有凑韵之嫌,这种句子尽量不要整句借过来,后二联写煮茶品茶的过程,个人情感不够突出,个见说错勿怪。 
 
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牛郎师评:问好看花,此诗遣词造句有些随手了,但毕竟格律诗不是打油诗,主题可轻松,下笔须严格,望多读古诗,增加语感,加油~! 
 
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