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问好镂石同学,咏物还是比较切合的,前两状物不错,后二联个别字词可斟酌下,如转联后三字不太妥帖,两个心字,彼岸花他折,最好不出现题字。
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问好疏竹同学,咏物彼岸花,前两联还是围绕着物来写,后两联有点脱离主题了,可再斟酌下,
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