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一散人老师点评:意脉不畅,意散乱了
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一散人老师点评:起后分句不通畅,起大气,后面虎头蛇尾了,给人意脉不畅。
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一散人老师点评:颈联不对仗,结按道理景结非常好,凄凄这里谴词差点。
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一散人老师点评:颔联颈联不对仗。
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