3095| 123
|
古典词十九初级班第四讲撷芳组作业贴 |
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
点评
静思试评:平仄格律都没问题。小令字少,越具体越好。本篇二三句处有断裂,个人认为直接写荷池会比这样的宕开一笔更好些,也恰好连接了第二个七言句和后面五言。
| ||
|Archiver|手机版|小黑屋|古典听风书院 ( 蜀ICP备15023305号-1 )
GMT+8, 2024-12-23 04:13 , Processed in 0.143555 second(s), 22 queries .
Powered by Discuz! X3.2 Licensed
© 2001-2013 Comsenz Inc.