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问候学友!作业格律自检哈。小令立意尚可,遣词造句和选取物象时得细细斟酌。横天雁,畔下可酌,上下片不在同一时空,月下,风里,雨里?还有飘丝的村边柳,杨柳如丝的季节在中秋时节吗?个见!海涵!期待下期精...
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同学好,梅花,这个牌咏梅想写好不容易,好多大师的在那里放着呢。读后感觉毛病不大,中规中矩,个别词语应考虑一下。惹,伍等。个见
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