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言通意顺,中二联没有拉开层次,且“才看、皆有、又见、难忘”词性类同而平头,显得呆板。
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言通意顺,二联上下意近,三联亦然,试试将二三联合并为二联,腾出三联宕开一笔,写些古今好酒者的奇闻轶事等,使内容更丰富。
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