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评:问好学友,首联,句子不太通顺,还费墨了,初凉与清爽。下分句,落叶,飘,飞,绕,几个动词在一个句子中,迎字,看是在凑韵之嫌疑。菊用在立秋不妥,请在斟酌一下。颔联,桂在立秋之时,不会开的,荷更不会残...
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