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阳春白雪简评:问好同学,首联颔联和颈联尾联格律错误,失替失对。再炼为佳!
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阳春白雪简评:问好同学,小律诗意不错,形象描绘了冰变化的各种形态意识。首联里惊艳二字需斟,颔联颈联对仗不错。颔联上句里王字音是平还是仄存疑,尾联意佳,继续加油!
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