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古典词27期初级班清扬组第13讲作业帖 |
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评阅-金麒麟:简评:上片险韵诗成,读来有点生涩。下片好于上片。
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评阅-金麒麟:简评,如电掣为凑韵之嫌。光阴似箭,这句读来别扭。朝暮暮改朝与暮最好,其他的尚可。
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