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问好诗友!墨缘乱语。此作是清明节怀念故人的词作。下片首句“嬉”字,第三句“如”字“不”出律。意脉还算顺畅,只是有些句子,尚需打磨,比如下片“父爱如山渺”,这句用了成语,但解释起来就有些不太合乎词意,怎
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