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此词语言流畅,意象清新,四组对仗(稻浪/层林、浅碧/撷取、棚头/径畔)大体工稳,节奏轻快,很好地传达了秋游农场的愉悦。若说可酌之处,“戏中塘”的“中塘”略嫌生涩,若作“戏横塘”或“戏池塘”可能更顺;另全
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