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一首不错的诗,写出了父爱如山,平时为儿女撑出一片天地,当黑暗来临之际也是陪儿女一起走过。脉络清晰,学习了。就是个别词多练,比如投身擎撑二字意思近了
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题目是恋夕阳,前两句景起,后两句有点脱节,建议把题目改下,这样才更关联
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